Maturita, angl. článek do časopisu, kontrola

Od: Datum: 26.04.13 16:48 odpovědí: 6 změna: 01.05.13 09:26
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Zdravím vás rádcové a rádkyně,

příští týden maturuji státně z angličtiny. Zkusila jsem si podle ilustračního zadání 2013 vypracovat jednu slohovou práci. Potřebovala bych jí zkontrolovat a popřípadě napsat názor, na kolik by to bylo bodů. Jestli jsem dodržela zadání, jestli jsem dodržela zadaný slohový útvar, jestli bych s mými chybami prošla... Nyní text práce, pod tím máte umístěné zadání. Díky moc všem.

School Trip to Brno City Theatre

On the 25 of September 2012 I took part in a school tip to Brno. Our class visited Brno City Theatre to see the performance Romeo and Juliet. We look forward to this day.

We arrived to Brno at 2.00 pm. Then we saw some sights and shoped souveniers. In the afternoon we stood in front of the theatre. The teacher gave us tickets and we could go inside to enjoy the tragedy about two young peole falling in love eatch other. We had very good seats - in the first row. The performance lasted about 2 hours.

I really enjoyed this school trip. Actors played so good, the charakter of Romeo was the best. What a pitty that both main roles had to die. We rewarded all men and women on the stage with a big applause. I can not find any mistakes on this great trip. When we went home, all students said that we would remember this wonderful play for long time.



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Od: axus®
Datum: 26.04.13 22:02
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Prekrocila si zadany pocet slov.

Podle mne si prilis nesplnila posledni ukol. - to hlavne, kdyz jsem cetl, jak prisne to posuzuji.

Obcas vynechavas pismena. Napr. tip misto trip, peole misto people...

Obcas nejaky clen. Napr. for a long time, in a front..., ale misto front (fuj) dat samozrejme jine slovo, napr queue je pekne

shoped souveniers - vazne?

Neco bych napsal stylisticky jinak, nekde bych pouzil perfektum, nektere vety dost skripou, ale rekl bych, ze na stredni skolu snad v pohode.

Ale nevim, jak hodnoti... Za jedna to ale urcite nebude.

Ohodnoceno: 0x
 
Od: bruno*
Datum: 26.04.13 23:49

Tak tohle je za kouli.

Napiste to takhle a mate jednicku jak lusk:

On the 25th of September 2012 I took part in a school trip to Brno. Our class visited Brno City Theatre to see the play Romeo and Juliet. We had been looking forward to that day.

We arrived in Brno at 2.00 pm. We went to see local sights and to buy some souvenirs. In the afternoon, we gathered in front of the theatre. Our teacher handed us tickets so we could go inside and enjoy the tragedy of two young people falling in love with each other. We got very good seats in the first row. The play lasted about two hours.

I really enjoyed this school trip. Actors played their roles very well and I liked the character of Romeo best. What a shame that both main characters had to die. We rewarded all the men and women on the stage with a big applause. I can not find any mistakes on this great trip. When we were returning home, all the students said that they would remember this wonderful play for a long time.

Ohodnoceno: 3x
 
Datum: 28.04.13 17:38
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Ještě bych vás poprosila o kontrolu tohoto dopisu. Chtěla jsem se vejít do 150 slov, což se mi také podařilo. Napsala jsem 142 slov.

Dear Mary,

Im writing you to say some news. Ive moved to a new flat in Brno. Im looking forward to living in the big city like Brno.

Do you want to know how my new home looks like? Well, the flats located near the city centre. Its quite latge, there are five room and a bathroom. Im so busy because Ive to buy a lot of new equipments. The best thing is that a furniture shop is near my house. However Ive to travel every day 20 minutes for my job.

And what about you? Did you enjoyed your school trip to Prague? It must have been great to see Karls Bridge an St. Vitus Cathedral.

Thats all from me. Please write soon and tell me some news about yourself.

Best wishes,

xxx.

Datum: 29.04.13 21:56
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I see some errors...

Dear Mary,

Im writing you to say some news. Ive moved to a new flat in Brno. Im looking forward to living in the big city like Brno.

Do you want to know what my new home looks like? Well, the flats located near the city centre. Its quite latge, there are five rooms and a bathroom. Im so busy because I have to buy a lot of new equipments. The best thing is that a furniture shop is near my house. However, I have to travel every day 20 minutes for my job.

And what about you? Did you enjoyed your school trip to Prague? It must have been great to see Carls Bridge an St. Vitus Cathedral.

Thats all from me. Please write soon and tell me some news about yourself.

Best wishes,

For me, "Ive to" looks very strange, I think that "I have to" is better.
Equipment - uncountable.

doplněno 29.04.13 22:45:

Ohodnoceno: 2x
 
Datum: 29.04.13 22:31
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Thank you very much, good soul, Praivo.

Datum: 01.05.13 09:26
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Ještě jeden text, našel by se někdo na kontrolu?

Časopis pro studenty anglického jazyka vyzval své čtenáře, aby napsali článek na téma: My favourite place. (120 - 150 slov). Body, které musím dodržet: 1) vysvětlit, proč jsem si dané místo vybrala (alespoň dva důvody). 2) Popsat dané místo. 3) Vyprávět o jedné události, kterou jsem na tom místě zažila.

Můj text:

The Beautiful Theatre in Brno

My favourite place is not my flat or our school. I chose the Brno City Theatre because I love musicals and here they do them very well. I also like the modern building of New Scene.

There is all news in this theatre. In the foyer the red colour is dominating. Inside the hall there are a lot of seats and the big stage. On ceiling you can find some lights. In front of the stage you can see the huge place where the orchestr is sitting.

Here I have experienced many events, but I never forget this one. On the 4th December 2012 I visited the musical The Little Shop of Horrors and after the end of the play I can go to the stage to hand a gift for my favourite actor. I think this place is most beautiful place in our country.

 

 

 

 

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