Oprava anglické eseje

Od: Datum: 29.03.13 17:03 odpovědí: 8 změna: 29.03.13 21:40

Dobrý den,

dostaly jsme ve škole zadáno, že máme psát essay na angličtinu na téma Travelig. Rozhodně nechci aby jste to psali za mě to v žádném případě, ale byla bych moc ráda, kdyby se mi na to někdo podíval a případně mi řekl, kdybych tam měla nějakou hrubou chybu. Nerada bych dostala špatnou známku.

Pokud by se někdo takovej našel byla bych moc vděčná,

Xyl.

TRAVELING

People can travel for many reasons. Many people want to see new places, meet new people, find a job or get better in some language. Some people just want to leave their house and live somewhere else.

On the other hand, some people does´t like traveling at all. They just want to be at home. They´re think i tis not worth it. It is stressfull for them. They think that thein country has everything they need.

I was in many foreign countries. Egypt, Turkay, Tunis, Greece, but I most enjoyed my trip to London. Last time when I was here I was there with my friends from school and It was really exciting. I was in London four times and I want to return here as soon as I can.

You can travel in many ways. For example today you can use plane, bus, car, ship or public transport. I hate public transport! It is usually crowded and full of wierd existences. But traveling by plane is awsome! I tis comfortable and fast, but it is not cheap at all.

Some people likes traveling, some people not. I personally love it. If I could I will travel all the time. Expecially I want to go to Great Britain! I want to move here _ to London or Manchester, maybe. I love british culture, language and heritage!


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Od: mirela
Datum: 29.03.13 17:26

Nenašla jsem v tom žádnou chybu.Je to zajmavý text

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Datum: 29.03.13 19:19
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Když to vezmu tak nějak stručně, co bych upravil..

People travel for.., get better in a foreign language, some people don't like, They think, stressful (jedno l), their country, Turkey, The last time I was there with my schoolmates (úplně vypustit tu divnou konstrukci na začátku), I was in London four times in total, return there, weird individuals, awesome, people like, people do not, I would travel all the time if I could, move there, British

Možná by se hodilo to nejdřív napsat nebo vymyslet česky s běžně rozvitými větami a pak to teprv překládat, aby to stylisticky k něčemu vypadalo, například: want to leave their old lives behind and live.., "not worth it" a "stressful" rozšířit třeba na They hate being put out of their comfort zone, having to fight the feeling of uncertainty on every step of their journey, when anything can go wrong at any time. Waiting at the station during bad weather and feeling both bored and irritated, flights getting cancelled, receiving wrong directions to a place to stay overnight, having their documents stolen, becoming hopeless and imprisoned within language barriers. They believe their country offers everything they could ever possibly need., Nowadays there are many means of transportation available: plane, bus..

doplněno 29.03.13 19:51:

I have been to London jsem si nevšim a ještě jsem to stejně blbě opsal *zed* :)

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Od: xylisnotonfire
Datum: 29.03.13 19:29

Ani nevíte jak moc jste mi pomohl! Mockrát děkuju ;) *tanec*

Datum: 29.03.13 19:29
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You have some (many) errors there:

On the other hand, some people does´tdon't like traveling at all. They just want to be at home. They´re think i tisit's not worth it. It is stressfull for them. They think that theintheir country has everything they need.

I've been to many foreign countries. Egypt, TurkayTurkey, Tunisia, Greece, but I most enjoyed my trip to London. Last time when I was there I was there with my friends from school and It was really exciting. I've been to London four times and I want to return there as soon as I can.

You can travel in many ways. For example today you can use a plane, bus, car, ship or public transport. I hate public transport! It is usually crowded and full of weird existences. But traveling by plane is awesome! It Is/It's comfortable and fast, but it is not cheap at all.

Some people likes traveling, some people do not. I personally love it. If I could I would travel all the time. Especially I want to go to Great Britain! I want to move there _ to London or Manchester, maybe. I love British culture, language and heritage(WTF do you mean by "heritage"?)!

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Od: xylisnotonfire
Datum: 29.03.13 20:27

Snažila jsem se to opravit.

People travel for many reasons. Many people want to see new places, meet new people, find a job or get better in foreign language. Some people just want to leave their old lives behind and live somewhere else.

On the other hand, some people don´t like traveling at all. They just want to be at home. They think it´s not worth it. They hate being put out their comfort zone. They think that everything can go wrong at any time. They belive their country offers everything they could ever possibly need.

You can travel in many ways. For example today you can use plane, bus, car, ship or public transport. I hate public transport! It is usually crowded and full of weird individuals. And I also hate waiting at the station durng bad weather. But traveling by plane is awesome! It is comfortable and fast, but it is not cheap at all. And flight sometimes getting canceld.

I have been to many foreign countries. Egypt, Turkey, Tunisia, Greece, but I most enjoyed my trip to London. The last time I was there with my schoolmates and It was really exciting. I´ve been to London four times in total and I want to return there as soon as I can.

Some people like traveling, some people do not. I personally love it. I will travel all the time if I could. Especially I want to go to Great Britain! I want to move there _ to London or Manchester, maybe. I love british culture, language and residants!

Datum: 29.03.13 20:31
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Better, but still with some errors:
And flights sometimes getting canceled.
I would travel all the time if I could.
I love British culture, language and residents!
doplněno 29.03.13 20:32:

WTF...?

And flights sometimes getting canceled.
I would travel all the time if I could.
I love British culture, language and residents!

doplněno 29.03.13 21:45:

I'm sorry for overlooking "canceled", but "Happy Endings" is a name of a TV show, that's why "gets" ([the show] gets). "Flights" is a different case (plural noun), there really is "get".

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Od: xylisnotonfire
Datum: 29.03.13 20:34

Thank you :D

(budu s tím muset něco dělat xD)

Datum: 29.03.13 21:40
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All happy endings gets cancelled ;)

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